2021er,你們的Essay有素材了嗎?

受疫情的影響,同學們都陸續開啟網課模式,對於2021的申請大軍們從某種程度上講,目前的情況給了大家一個相當充足的自我提升和準備的時間。

你們都在做什麼呢?


與我們國內的大學申請不同,美國大學錄取的原則是考量學生的綜合能力,包括潛在學術能力,創造力,以及領導力,團隊合作等優秀個人品質。申請文書就像是用英語拼接成一幅自畫像,或者說是相當於文字版的面試。申請者通過這些文書,讓未來大學瞭解你過去的經歷,你的成就、現在的能力和未來藍圖,是什麼原因讓你擁有這些有價值的東西。


所以,美本申請中文書很重要,而重中之重就是Essay的寫作。


美國本科申請通常採用三種申請系統,分別為Common Application、UC和CAAS。每個系統適用的院校有所不同,各自沿用一整套文書題目。


2021er,你們的Essay有素材了嗎?


UC加州大學申請系統

加州大學的本科申請系統是公用的。一方面可以為申請者節約填寫申請表格的時間;另一方面,加州大學會按照統一的標準來錄取學生。加州大學的申請系統適用於申請加州大學的十所學校:


加州大學伯克利分校 UBC

加州大學洛杉磯分校 UCLA

加州大學聖巴巴拉分校 UCSB

加州大學聖地亞哥分校 UCSD

加州大學歐文分校 UCI

加州大學戴維斯分校 UCD

加州大學聖克魯茲分校 UCSC

加州大學河濱分校 UCR

加州大學默賽德分校 UCM


2021er,你們的Essay有素材了嗎?

CAAS

(The Coalition for Access,Affordability and Success)旨在為低收入家庭的子女提供進入美國名校學習的機會。CAAS系統從2017年開始正式接受學生申請。學生從九年級(美國高一)開始就可以在申請系統內建立自己的大學申請檔案, 將自己的學習和生活記錄上傳到申請文件夾中,便於大學招生官更加全面地瞭解申請人。目前已經有140多所美國學校可以通過此係統來申請。


2021er,你們的Essay有素材了嗎?


Common Application

(通常被稱作Common App)是美國以及其他一些國家的大學本科入學的一站式申請網站,目前已經廣泛適用於800百多所美國大學,其中包括哈佛,耶魯,普林斯頓等名校。它的使命是鼓勵申請者使用這種一站式的申請,簡化原本複雜繁瑣的程序,包括申請文書、推薦信的提交,以及SAT分數和班級排名的報告等主客觀因素。


近日,CA申請系統更新了2020-2021申請季的申請文書題目提示。據官網最新消息發佈:Common App 2020-2021新生申請的PS文書題目將保持不變,即沿用2019-2020申請季的PS文書題目,申請者可從7大文書題目中任選一個寫作。


題目一:Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.


譯文:如果你認為自己的某些特徵,比如背景、身份、興趣或天賦,是你不可缺少的一部分,它們會幫助你全面地展現自己,那麼請分享屬於你的故事。


解釋:此題是Common Essay中最傳統的申請短文題目之一,Common Application多次改革,自始至終一直沿用至今。申請者通過你的故事學校可以瞭解你的鮮明性格特點、不為人知的經歷以及獨樹一幟的才能天賦,為學校呈現一個與眾不同的自己。


題目二:The lessons we take from obstacles we encounter can be fundamental to later success. Recount a time when you faced a challenge, setback, or failure. How did it affect you, and what did you learn from the experience?


譯文:我們從苦難阻礙中學習到的經驗教訓對之後的成功至關重要。回憶你一次你面對挑戰、阻礙或者失敗的經歷。它是如何影響你的,以及你從中學到了什麼?


解釋:正如題目提到的,美國的大學相信過去的經歷塑造了今天的你,因此毫無疑問,題為寫“失敗”,但實則應透過這次經歷展現你的“成長”。除了告訴招生官自己失敗的經歷外,最重要的是要讓對方看到你從中獲得的經驗教訓是什麼,不要一味單純描述失敗。


這個題目比2016年增加了挑戰、阻礙內容要求,之前的要求是隻寫失敗就可以了,申請者應當書寫文書時應當注意重點。


題目三:Reflect on a time when you questioned or challenged a belief or idea. What prompted your thinking? What was the outcome?


譯文:回憶一次你質疑或挑戰某種觀念和想法的經歷。是什麼啟發了你的思考呢? 結果如何?


解釋:本題目更加趨向“在質疑某個觀點後,你思考的全過程以及你挑戰後的結果”,這個挑戰的結果可以是成功的,也可以是失敗的。重要的是這個問題對你的影響,所引發的思考以及你最終努力後達到的積極效果,避免在招生官面前造成一種“思想上的巨人,行動上的矮子”的形象。如果你選這道題,需要注意critical thinking或者challenge a belief 不是代表你要全盤否定某個想法。


這個題目也是CA逐漸完善的題目,之前題目側重你的挑戰動機是什麼,升級後的重點是你做了些什麼。


題目四:Describe a problem you've solved or a problem you'd like to solve. It can be an intellectual challenge, a research query, an ethical dilemma - anything that is of personal importance, no matter the scale. Explain its significance to you and what steps you took or could be taken to identify a solution.


譯文:描述一個你已經解決或想要解決的問題。可以是智力挑戰,研究調查,道德困境——任何對你個人來說非常重要的都行,不論大小。解釋它對你的重要性,以及你是如何一步步找到或計劃找到解決辦法的。


解釋:這道題目招生官最想看到的是分析問題和解決問題的能力,非常適合工科類、不愛肆意抒情的學生選擇。從小事兒出發。只要你能說清問題對你的意義,並提出解決方法。所以還是文書的原則,以小見大。很多不專業的老師會建議學生寫大事情,一個高中生哪有那麼大事情可做呢?


題目五:Discuss an accomplishment, event, or realization that sparked a period of personal growth and a new understanding of yourself or others.


譯文:描述讓你成長或者讓重新認識自己或他人的一個成就、事件、或者感悟。


解釋:題目強調個人成長和自我認知。請盡情地去描繪人生中那些重要的時刻,讓你成長,使你對未來的學習、生活或者某種觀念有了更好的認知。事件可大可小,強調寫個人成長經歷中一件非常具有特殊意義的經歷,讓我們在思想變得更加成熟。


題目六:Describe a topic, idea, or concept you find so engaging that it makes you lose all track of time. Why does it captivate you? What or who do you turn to when you want to learn more?


譯文:描述一個讓沉迷其中,甚至忘記時間的話題、想法、理念。它哪裡吸引你? 當你試圖去了解更多的時候,你會求助於什麼樣的幫助?


解釋:這題中考察的點和第三題,第四題相仿,都是需要考察出學生自己真正的興趣所在, 以及自學能力中, 有沒有足夠的辨識度和激勵性來讓自己的學習繼續, 和其中發生的故事或者經歷。招生官希望看到applicants的學習動力以及學習能力,考察他們如何利用身邊的資源來學習。大家不要忽視後半句,招生官希望看到有趣的素材。


題目七:Share an essay on any topic of your choice. It can be one you've already written, one that responds to a different prompt, or one of your own design.


譯文:題目自擬,可以是你之前寫好的文章或者任何你自創的選題。


解釋:這道題目看似簡單,但是這7個裡面最難的。因為如果你發現自己寫的東西和其它6道題目都有沾點邊兒,但是你選了7,會有種possibility讓人覺得你寫的東西很散。還不如選擇一個題目去寫,所以選擇此題目的同學一定要慎重。


那麼,如何寫出好文書呢?

在寫作Essay的時候,謹記4個“C”就能讓你下筆如有神,寫出招生官想要的文書:Correctness(準確),Content(有料),Clarity (清晰),Creativity(新穎)。


準確Correctness:用詞準確,時態、拼寫和標點沒有錯誤。這一標準用來評判學生是否具備基本英文寫作能力。


有料Content:檢查文章是否圍繞學生自身來寫,是否真實,是否展現學生個性、才能以及思想深度,能否引起反思。


清晰Clarity:文章簡潔,觀點清晰明確;運用恰當的措辭、詞彙、語法以及多樣精緻的句式結構,這是即將步入大學的高中生應該必備的。


新穎Creativity:能否吸引讀者的注意力?主題表達是否新穎?


在寫文章時沒有一個固定的所謂完美的題材。招生官喜歡閱讀許多不同主題和題材的文章,只要這篇文章是真實可信的,同時也表達出學生真正的想法,並且還包含了以上提到的四點。


最後摘選一篇Essay:

----來自青少年創新與挑戰計劃


小M現就讀於斯坦福大學

錄取結果:8所藤校及斯坦福、MIT、芝加哥

背景:畢業於北達科他州的Fargo North High School

ACT:35分(滿分為36分);

參加過很多數學競賽;

是Fargo Youth Initiative項目的創始人和共同主席;

同時多才多藝,喜歡並參與田徑、游泳、小提琴、合唱等活動。


Essay


My favorite time to run is at night.


This particular run in early August brought a break to the humid, muggy weather I left on the East Coast. I used my body as a human psychrometer, knowing that the cold feeling of evaporating sweat signaled much needed dry air.


I cross over the bridge into Minnesota. Out of my three sports, cross country is definitely my worst — but I continue to be hooked on it. Unlike swimming and track, my motivation to run is heavily intrinsic. I live for the long runs I take on by myself. While they rarely happen during our season, we were assigned a long run to complete over our first weekend of cross country. In reality, I was supposed to go six miles, but felt eight gave me more time to explore the home I had just returned to. My mind begins to wander as I once again find my rhythm.


My train of thought while running is similar to the way one thinks in the minutes before sleep — except one has more control over how these thoughts progress and what tangents they move off of. While special relativity would be the "proper" thing to think about, especially at MITES, I revive the violin repertoire I had turned away from for so long and begin playing it in my head. I'm now at the edge of town in between the cornfields. The streaming floodlights on the open road give me a sense of lonely curiosity, reminiscent of the opening lines of Wieniawski's first violin concerto. I come up with adaptations of the melody in my head, experimenting with an atonality similar to Stravinsky's.


I turn south onto a highway heading towards downtown. The dark night sky is broken by the oncoming light pollution. While I've longed for a road trip across the country, the neon lights from Sunset Lanes will have to do for Las Vegas. Turning west, I see a man and perk up as I try to look more menacing than I really am. But I relinquish. I realize that I did such an act simply because of the color of his skin. I kick myself for reverting to passive racism — something I spent much of the summer trying to overcome.


The bridge over Main Avenue leads me back into North Dakota and downtown Fargo. My city is on the eve of its annual pride week — the largest in North Dakota. Beyond the rainbow flags lining downtown, I see the Catholic cathedral I attend every Sunday outside of the summer. The juxtaposition brings back memories of trying to come to terms with my own beliefs. The conservatism on my mom's side of the family often clashes with the more liberal views of my dad's family. Fargo is known for its "nice" attitude, but the discussion of controversial issues is often set aside in favor of maintaining peace. On the surface this can be good, but it makes change a long and cumbersome process, and has caused me to become very independent in finding my own belief system — something especially difficult when these beliefs may have to do with your future identity.


The remaining part of my run is short and uneventful. The fact that the traffic lights have switched to blinking yellow and red means that I have been out later than usual. When I get home, I find that my run took somewhere around an hour — I honestly don't care about time during my distance runs. Longs runs are often seen as a runner battling the distance rather than time. But for me, long runs are a journey — both physically and mentally. Each time I run a route, I understand my surroundings and city more and more, and couldn't be more excited and sad to know that I'm leaving this place in a year's time.


2021er,你們的Essay有素材了嗎?


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