2019年高考二輪複習 書面表達之圖畫類
教材版本
全國通用
課時說明（建議）
2課時
知識點
書面表達圖畫類
複習目標
（1）知識目標：瞭解圖畫類書面表達的命題特點、解題方法及技巧。
（2）能力目標：熟練掌握常考的語法點，正確運用解題思路及備考策略。
（3）情感目標：揭開圖畫類書面表達的面紗，使學生樹立信心，從容應對。
複習重點
圖畫類書面表達的寫作形式
複習難點
圖畫類書面表達的寫作形式
一、高考回顧
（2018，北京卷）
假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華，請根據以下四幅圖的先後順序，寫一篇英文週記，記述你們上週接待外國學生，帶領他們體驗中國茶文化的全過程。
注意：詞數不少於60。
【答案】
Last week, we took the foreign students in our school to experience the authentic tea culture, which turned out be to extremely rewarding.
On arriving at the tea house, the foreign students were impressed by the unique tea pots and tea cups. I gave them a vivid and informative introduction of tea culture, including its profound history, its rich variety, and the exquisite craftsmanship of making tea with their interest greatly sparked, I then began to teach them how to make tea.
In order to deliver a clear presentation, I slowly explained the traditional procedure of making tea in detail. Absorbed in every move of mine, the foreign students were once again amazed by this unique culture and they couldn’t help taking pictures from time to time.
Next came the moment when I asked them to have a try themselves. Washing the tea pots, adding tea leaves, and pouring water into the cups, they followed my instructions and were really immersed in charming tea culture. The tea house witnessed a really enjoyable time for all of us.
At the end of the activity, holding the tea bags in our hands, we took a picture to memorize the unforgettable day. It suddenly hit me that traditional culture like tea culture was of great charm and huge value. And I swelled with pride to spread our own culture to people all over the world.
【解析】
今年主要以“體驗中國茶文化”為主題，貼合了實際生活。首先看懂圖畫，弄清要點：1、參觀茶室；2、示範沏茶過程；3、體驗沏茶、品茶；4、合影留念。寫作時注意使用主旨句，在保證要點齊全的前提下適當增加句子的長度和難度，藉助非謂語、定語從句、倒裝等語法形式來給文章增色，同時注意文章的連貫效果，注意使用一般過去時。
二、知識清單
1．給提示結構
通過原題的簡單敘述要求及圖畫的內容，我們基本可以瞭解文章的寫作目的及意圖，這是出題人的觀點；而還需要考慮下閱卷人的感受，這部分需要的是選擇適當的結構和單詞來表達個人想法的同時，符合閱讀習慣，層次分明，用詞得當。
2．隱含條件發掘
本部分也屬於揣摩出題人意圖的重要部分，一般的文章之所以提示“可適當增加細節”的原因就在於需要通過作文來檢測學生的思維能力，即情商部分，如何把一件事說得更為得當。
3.適當細節拓展
在上述基礎上，細節的適當拓展有利於表達寫作人的個人態度情感價值觀以及有內涵的單詞及好的作文句型，以引起閱卷人的青睞及共鳴。
三、例題精講
【2017·北京卷】
假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華，請根據以下四幅圖的先後順序，寫一篇英文週記，記錄畢業前夕你們製作以“感恩母校”為主題的畢業紀念視頻的全過程。
注意：詞數不少於60。
提示詞：視頻video
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【解析】 本文為校園生活類體裁，主題為畢業紀念視頻。內容有討論、拍攝、視頻製作和展示等。同時，根據圖畫類文章的寫作方式，寫作時注意以下幾點：
1.仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確：從以上三張圖片中選擇一張；
2.根據要表達的內容確定好句子的時態，語態；就本文而言應該用一般現在時態。但注意，在具體描述故事的時候一定使用一般過去時；
3.注意選擇使用高級詞彙和句式，以增加文章亮點；
參考詞彙和句型：
1) In order to leave some impressive memories for all of us before graduation, our class made a special video to express our appreciation to…
2) carried out a discussion/various ideas were put forward
3) shot some wonderful videos in the school/interviewed our teachers…
4) Those who are talented in computer contributed to the making of the video.
5) edited the video/added our love to…
6) The show received a warm welcome among our fellow schoolmates.
7) Memories of the past flooded into our minds/firm bond to our school…
難題分析：
在寫這篇作文的時候，難點在於①描述圖片時候選用亮點的表述方式及對應結構，如選擇學生們討論問題這一個圖片，需要注意適當描述討論分工；②收集素材；③編輯製作；④放映視頻。
【A possible vision】
Graduation finally came. My classmates and I decided to do something. After a heated discussion, we agreed on making a video to record our experiences at school. Material collecting took us a whole week, during which we interviewed our teachers and took pictures of every aspect of school life. The editing part after that was tough. We debated over what to put into the video. Some compromises were unavoidable, but the video turned out perfect. Several days later, when the video was played on the graduation ceremony, it was well received. The students and teachers shared a great time. That surely gave us a great sense of achievement.
四、思維點撥
Tip 1描述圖畫類作文
1. 需要認真判斷需要描述的圖畫的要求和目的
【例1】( 2015年普通高等學校招生全國統一考試(福建卷)英語)
請閱讀下面圖畫，按要求用英語寫一篇詞數為120左右的短文。
內容要求：
1、描述畫面；
2、概述其含義；
3、談談個人感想。
鑿壁偷光
【解析】 根據所給圖畫顯示，為中國古代成語“鑿壁偷光”的故事，那麼在描述圖畫的時候就需要注意，一定將雖然家貧但求學精神令人鼓舞描述出來，這樣為後面的評論和個人感想打下基本基礎。故在寫作時候可以寫為：
In the picture, we can see a boy in worn clothes, sitting at shabby wooden table with a pile of books on it. A weak ray of light came through a small hole in the wall and he was absorbed in his reading.
在判斷目的後，就可以在選擇表達方式和單詞方面下功夫，尋找合適的單詞和結構。
【例2】 ( 2015年普通高等學校招生全國統一考試(福建卷)英語)
上述這一段In the picture, we can see a boy in worn clothes, sitting at shabby wooden table with a pile of books on it. A weak ray of light came through a small hole in the wall and he was absorbed in his reading.
上述文字使用表語從句表述更為有深度，對比的效果會更加明顯，如：
Worn clothes, shabby wooden table and weak ray of light are what makes the boy’s studying environment very poor, however, he is absorbed in his reading, caring about nothing but his reading.
【解析】 上述用法中更加突出了Worn clothes, shabby wooden table and weak ray of light這些條件的對比，而最後的caring about nothing but his reading則重點突出了這個男孩對於知識的渴求，間接傳遞寫作人的個人情感態度。
2．需要對圖畫含義進行解釋
一般在對圖畫含義進行解釋的過程中，就是對於學生潛在信息發掘及整理能力的一種檢測，所以在此過程中，所體現出來的單詞和結構，表述方式都和文章的主題目的保持一致。
【例】 ( 2015年普通高等學校招生全國統一考試(福建卷)英語)
This is a well-known story from an ancient Chinese idiom. The boy, being poor, couldn’t afford even a candle, so he bored a hole in the wall to “steal” light from his neighbor’s house to read at night. The moral of the story is: spear no effort to acquire knowledge and never get discouraged easily no matter how difficult the situation may be.
【解析】 先解釋圖畫的來源及闡述的意思，再說明其現實的意義，為個人感想在後面的抒發起到鋪墊作用，與文章要求保持一致。
3．談談個人感想
在任何圖畫類作文中，其要求中均建議由個人想法的闡述，還是以上一篇文章為例，在談到顯示生活中的例子的時候，可以考慮將個人的想法與現實生活結合，得出具有指導性的建議或想法，同時具有演講力的結尾會讓文章更為昇華。
【例】Of course, things are totally different today. It is not the story itself but what is reflected in the story that counts. Hard work pays off. We should take pains to improve ourselves through learning and get prepared for the future.
【解析】 對於今天的生活狀態，用“It is not the story itself but what is reflected in the story that counts”來揭示這篇文章需要告訴大眾的最終目的。在上述寫作中，最後一部分可以適當考慮選用具有演講力的表達。
如：Every hard job will pay off, and the harder the situation is, the more power one can get for his aim, what’s more, where there is a hardship, there is also a good chance for you to find your potential, from which we can see that it is not how hard the environment is that matters, but whether you know your dream and find ways to solve the problem.
★考法小結
但凡需要描述圖畫含義的圖畫類作文均需要三點：
①理解出題意圖並在描述圖片中適當體現；
②揭示圖片所表述的含義及現實意義；
③結合實際說出自己的想法或呼籲大家一起努力；
這樣既能傳遞出文章的想法，也能通過恰當單詞的選用及語法結構的表述給閱卷人留下好的印象，當然，筆記工整是必須的。
Tip 2 圖畫故事類作文
此類文章一般在於對故事的敘述佔主要篇幅，但是在解讀題目的時候可以發現，不僅僅是需要對故事進行描述，實際上在描述中也需要通過選用的單詞對主題進行深化，在結尾處有一定的渲染，避免文章成為純套路式的展示，無法給閱卷人留下印象，即智商有餘情商不足。
【例】（2015年普通高等學校招生全國統一考試(北京卷)英語）
假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。請根據以下四幅圖的先後順序，介紹在“傳統文化進校園”活動中，向麵人藝術家學習捏麵人的過程，並從“A Day with a Craftsman”為題，給校刊“英語角”寫一篇英文稿件。
注意：詞數不少於60。
提示詞：一個麵糰 a piece of dough
麵人 dough figurine
【解析】文章需要自己寫出開頭，需要學生寫一個事件的概括及總體感受作為第一段，而最後則需要進行一定主題昇華，即這次活動給學生們帶來的價值觀方面的改變；
這樣就可以發現這種文章寫的時候的三部分：
①開頭的總體概況及感受
②故事的發展過程，此時可以考慮是用first, second等使得故事的層次感更加明確；
③事件完畢的思考和價值觀方面的改變影響；
【答案】
Last Tuesday，our class invited an old craftsman to teach us how to make dough figurines, which leaves us a deep impression on our traditional art.
When the craftsman came into the classroom, we give him a warm welcome and two boys helped him with the tool box. First, he showed us the basic steps and skills of making dough figurines. We stood around him and watched attentively. Then we started to have a try ourselves. The old man walked around and helped us patiently.
Finally we put the figurines we made on the table and took pictures with the old craftsman. Looking at the figurines, we were all very excited.
Traditional arts like making dough figurines are what makes us know our history well and we can also know who we are, where we come from and where we are going to, because of which we hope we can have more activities of this kind.
【亮點分析】
上述範文使用了first, then, finally 等來銜接句子和段落，表示事情發生的時間順序，使作文更有條理，做到了行文連貫，在最後進行了主題昇華，給讀者更多的啟發和活動的力度展示。
記敘故事使用一般過去時，注意了文章上下文時態的一致原則；同時範文使用了一些重要的語法知識，非謂語動詞Looking at the figurines, we were all very excited，限定性定語從句we put the figurines we made on the table，尤其是最後一段的表語從句，賓語從句，狀語從句及非限定性定語從句的一氣呵成用法，給文章增色不少。
★考法小結
圖畫故事類作文因有敘述及適當評論部分，所以在寫作時候注意四點：
①文章主題的審視和把握；
②故事脈絡的確定，本環節旨在確定文章中幾個銜接詞，共有幾句話；
③時態的確定。敘述故事一般均為一般過去時，但其他環節一定注意一般現在時居多；
④評論環節通過故事的評論過程，給文章以主題的昇華。
技巧點撥
圖畫類作文在寫作中，只要突破了審題方面對於圖片的目的的把握這一環節，確定好寫作的脈絡和時態的選擇，加以適當的評論或與現實結合的評論性語言，就會給文章以色彩方面的渲染並且保持與主題一致，使得文章不但有良好的表現力，更有深度方面的影響，為與出題意圖、閱卷規則契合做好充分基礎搭建，以提高作文的得分率。
五、成果鞏固
【基礎達標】
Passage1
（【全國百強校】江蘇省泰州中學2017-2018學年高二6月調研測試英語試題）
在早災和震災中的孩子們雖然通到了無法想象的困難，但他們仍然沒有放棄學習。請簡要描述這兩張照片，並談談你的感想。文章的開頭已經給出。
在乾旱的雲南省的一所小學中，孩子們雖然面臨飲水和飢餓的困擾，但他們還是在認真聽講。
一位上小學二年級的女童緊抱著自己的課本，站在震後的廢墟前。
注意：詞數150左右。開頭已經寫好，不計入總詞數。
Natural disasters left students in miserable life. However, they never gave up study.
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Passage2
(2018, 北京市朝陽區高三英語5月二模試卷）
假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。請根據以下四幅圖的先後順序，介紹你們班上週開展“為母校留念”活動的完整過程，並以“A Special Present”為題，給校刊“英語角”寫篇英文稿件。詞數不少於60。
A Special Present
Passage3
（2019，安徽省江淮十校高三聯考）
假設你是李華，請根據你對下面一副圖片的觀察，給一家知名報社專欄“Voice Your Opinion”寫一封信，談談你的觀點與看法。
注意:1. 自選角度和內容;
2. 字數100 左右;
3. 信的開頭和結尾已寫好(不計入總詞數)。
【答案和解析】
Passage1
【答案】
Natural disasters left students in miserable life. However, they never gave up study. As it’s shown in the two pictures, in a primary school in Yunan, students are learning attentively even though they were in serious trouble of lacking food and drinkable water. It is obvious that they want to equip themselves with knowledge. A girl stood in front of ruins after the earthquake, holding her books firmly in hand. There is no doubt that she is thirsty for knowledge.
The students in the two photos deserve our admiration. Though experiencing disasters, they still have a strong desire for study. Their perseverance and striving spirit touched everyone’s heart.
The two photos also set me thinking that I should value what I have. When facing a sticky problem, I won’t give up. I will regard devotion as my goal in life, having more diligence and fewer complaints. Meanwhile, I appeal to the whole society to take actions to improve their living conditions.
【解析】這是一篇看圖說話。考生首先要簡要描述兩張照片的內容，體會兩張照片體現的含義。其次，根據照片內容寫出要點主題句，然後展開細節描述。注意時態，第一幅照片應用現在時態，第二幅照片應用過去時態。介紹自己的感想應用現在時態。
【亮點分析】所給範文內容齊全，句子流暢，要點明確，條理清楚，長短句結合。適當運用一些較好的詞彙或句式：1. It is obvious that… 2. There is no doubt that… 3. 非謂語動詞holding her books firmly in hand 4. appeal to
Passage2
【答案】
A Special Present
Last week, my classmates and I did something significant to express our gratitude to our school.
Earlier the week we had a discussion on what to give to our school for our graduation. Numerous choices were offered, including a beautiful gift and a memorial tree. Finally we agreed to plant a tree on campus. Having made the decision, we searched online and ordered a seedling after careful selection. On a sunny day our seedling arrived and we got down to planting it immediately. Everyone participated actively. Some placed the seedling in the hole, some covered the root with soil and others stood a board next to it reading “Class 1 Senior 3, 2018”. Sweaty as we were, everyone was excited. We posed for photographs to mark this precious occasion.
We were all delighted to give our school a special present. We expect that this seedling will grow into an enormous leafy tree some day!
【解析】
本題是一篇看圖作文，要求根據四幅圖的先後順序，寫一篇英文週記，記述上週接待外國學生，帶領他們體驗中國茶文化的全過程。本題對考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強的謀篇佈局的能力和組織要點的能力。寫作時考生需要注意緊扣文章主題，各幅圖的要點都需要包括，缺一不可。同時注意準確運用時態，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關係，儘量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，以及使用高級詞彙和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。
【亮點】本篇作文要點齊全，結構完整，條理清晰，應用了較多的語法結構和詞彙，熟練地使用了語句間的連接成分，使整個文章結構緊湊，很好地完成了寫作任務。例如： Having made the decision, we searched online and ordered a seedling after careful selection.運用了現在分詞的完成式；On a sunny day our seedling arrived and we got down to planting it immediately. 運用了並列句；Sweaty as we were, everyone was excited.運用了倒裝句和讓步狀語從句；We expect that this seedling will grow into an enormous leafy tree some day!運用了賓語從句。
Passage3
【答案】
Dear editor,
In Chinese tradition, family reunion always plays a very important part in communication. When a national holiday falls, members of a family will probably gather together to visit the seniors and enjoy being with each other. In this picture, we can see that grandchildren of different ages are surrounding their granny. However, all of them merely focus their attention on smartphones and nobody seems to talk with their granny willingly. We can imagine how helpless and disappointed their granny is at the sight of this. Behind the picture also lies the fact that smartphones are depriving us of face-to-face communication with others, even among dearest ones. What a pity! I hope that we should respect the moments when we are together for a reunion and throw the smartphones aside !
Best wishes !
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【解析】
本文考查看圖作文。首先考生應該認真讀圖，把握中心。一幅圖常為議論文，時態通常用一般現在時，可以分為三段寫，第一段概述照片內容，常用開頭語有:In the picture above we can see...; There is a cartoon about...; As we can see in the picture...; From the picture, we can see that...；或者It can be seen/concluded from the picture that...等等。第二段描述這幅照片所展示何種社會現象及造成該現象的原因，這一段應該是重點，要詳寫。第三段談談你的觀點和看法，常用句型有：From what has been mentioned above, we may conclude that...；Therefore, it is not difficult to come to the conclusion that...；It is clear, therefore, that...； All in all, what really matters is...等等。
【亮點】When a national holiday falls, members of a family will probably gather together to visit the seniors and enjoy being with each other.開門見山點明中心主題。We can imagine how helpless and disappointed their granny is at the sight of this.使用了賓語從句和短語at the sight of。
Behind the picture also lies the fact that smartphones are depriving us of face-to-face communication with others, even among dearest ones.使用了倒裝句式和that引導的同位語從句。
I hope that we should respect the moments when we are together for a reunion and throw the smartphones aside !使用了賓語從句和狀語從句。
【能力提升】
Passage4
（2018， 河北省衡水中學高三第十次模擬）
假設你是中學生李華。下面四幅圖記錄了週日你在人民公園踏青的經歷。請據圖用英語寫一篇日記。注意：詞數100左右。
Sunday, May4 Fine
Passage5
（2019， 北京市精華學校高三英語考前測試卷）
假設你是紅星中學學生李華，上週參加了學校組織的“京郊美麗鄉村”展示活動，為此，你與父母一起去感受了鄉村的變化。請根據下列四幅圖的先後順序，給美國筆友Peter寫信，介紹你參加此次活動的全過程。
Dear Peter,
How are things going?
Last week, I took part in the show of “Beautiful Villages around Beijing” in our school.
.........
Do keep in touch.
Best wishes!
Li Hua
Passage6
（2018，北京市石景山區高三上學期英語期末考試試卷）
假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。上星期六，你和同學們參觀了中國近五年偉大成就展。請按照以下四幅圖的先後順序，以“A Visit to the Exhibition on China’s Achievements”為題，給校刊“英語角”寫一篇英文稿件，介紹參觀的全過程。
注意：詞數不少於60。
提示詞：講解員 docent
【答案和解析】
Passage4
【答案】
Sunday, May 4 Fine
It was a sunny day today and I went to Xishan Park for a spring outing. The moment I entered the park, a variety of beautiful flowers and green trees came into sight. Attracted by the beauty, I couldn't stop taking photos. As I wandered along the path, enjoying the beautiful view, I notices something unpleasant. Two schoolgirls jumped over the fence to pick flowers and climb the tree. Obviously they didn't realize that their behavior had done great damage to the beauty of the park. Without hesitation, I went up and stopped them politely. Quite embarrassed, the two girls came out immediately. Then they took pictures outside the fence. Seeing that, I smiled and everything looked nicer in my eyes.
【解析】
本題是一篇看圖寫作，一共四幅圖，展示了週日在人民公園踏青的經歷。做題時：1. 認真讀圖，可知四幅圖記錄了週日你在人民公園踏青的經歷，2. 初步構思，考慮用詞、短語、句型和時態，講述上週日的事情用過去時為基本時態。3. 連詞成句，然後再連句成文。儘可能地充分利用所學的短語或句型來表述具體的內容。4. 反覆審核，修改錯誤。5. 注意所給的提示。在把握了文章的中心後，應在內心構思一個基本的框架，並考慮使用恰當的詞語、短語和句型，以充分地表達文章的內容。這是體現自身能力的重要一環。然後再將各圖的單個句子串連起來。串連時，要注意使用適當的連接詞語或過渡性語句，不至於讓讀者覺得文章中出現跳躍現象，更使上下文更為緊湊、自然。
【亮點】本篇作文要點齊全，結構完整，條理清晰，應用了較多的語法結構和詞彙，熟練地使用了語句間的連接成分，使整個文章結構緊湊，很好地完成了寫作任務。例如：The moment I entered the park, a variety of beautiful flowers and green trees came into sight. 和As I wandered along the path, enjoying the beautiful view, I notices something unpleasant. 運用了時間狀語從句；Obviously they didn't realize that their behavior had done great damage to the beauty of the park. 運用了賓語從句； Seeing that, I smiled and everything looked nicer in my eyes.運用了現在分詞作原因狀語。
Passage5
【答案】
Dear Peter,
How are things going?
Last week, I took part in the show of “Beautiful Villages around Beijing” in our school. On Sunday morning, my parents and I went to the suburbs to get some information for my poster. On arriving at the destination, we were impressed by the beautiful scenery and people's living conditions. I took many photos. Then we chatted with a farmer, who told us about the changes these years. They now can get online to learn agricultural science and trade their products. And in spare time they can enjoy various leisure activities, like table tennis and chess. The next day I put my pictures and an article on the school wall newspaper. I feel proud of the development of our country.
Do keep in touch.
Best wishes!
Li Hua
【解析】
本題是一篇圖畫類作文，要求學生根據圖畫內容簡單描述上週參加了學校組織的“京郊美麗鄉村”展示活動中你與父母一起去感受了鄉村的變化的情景，要根據文章內容適當增添細節。考生要對各幅圖畫進行分析、構思和想象，依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定的邏輯關係來寫，根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態、語態。寫作時考生注意要靈活運用英語知識，採用不同的表達方式將各要點完整地表述出來，同時應選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。以及使用高級詞彙和句式，增加文章的亮點。
【亮點】本書面表達要點齊全，上下文連貫，使用一定數量的句式結構，讓句子更加生動豐滿，同時運用了許多高級詞彙和固定短語，提高文章的檔次，體現了對英語的熟練的駕馭能力。On arriving at the destination, we were impressed by the beautiful scenery and people's living conditions. 運用了動名詞作介詞賓語和介詞短語作狀語；Then we chatted with a farmer, who told us about the changes these years. 運用了定語從句； Do keep in touch.運用了祈使句。
Passage6
【答案】
Last Saturday, my classmates and I went to the Beijing Exhibition Hall to see the exhibition on China’s achievements in the last 5 years which turned out to be a memorable experience for us.
The exhibition attracted thousands of people all over the country, so we had to wait a long time to get in. Luckily, we met a docent who gave us a detailed introduction of the development during these years. We Listened attentively and were deeply impressed by the brilliant success of our country. When we stepped into the Hi-tech display section, our eyes were caught by the fashionable appearance of the high-speed train model “Fuxing”, which is popularly called one of the “New Four Great Inventions” of China. We were so amazed at the exhibits that we couldn’t help taking pictures all the time. Before leaving, with the words “Chinese Dream” as a setting, we had a group photo to record the great moment.
The visit to the Exhibition gives us greater faith in Chinese dream, to which our personal dreams are closely related.
【解析】
本文是一篇看圖作文。上星期六，你和同學們參觀了中國近五年偉大成就展。請按照以下四幅圖的先後順序，以“A Visit to the Exhibition on China’s Achievements”為題，給校刊“英語角”寫一篇英文稿件，介紹參觀的全過程。認真閱讀四幅圖畫，認清寫作要求然後確定文章的主題、文體、人稱和時態。列出要點，並以此為基礎充分發揮自己的想象力，靈活運用英語知識，採用不同的表達方式將各要點完整地表述出來。寫作時注意時態、語態的合理運用，同時應選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。
【亮點】本篇作文要點齊全，結構完整，條理清晰，應用了較多的語法結構和詞彙，熟練地使用了語句間的連接成分，使整個文章結構緊湊，很好地完成了寫作任務。例如： Last Saturday, my classmates and I went to the Beijing Exhibition Hall to see the exhibition on China’s achievements in the last 5 years which turned out to be a memorable experience for us.和we met a docent who gave us a detailed introduction of the development during these years.運用了定語從句；When we stepped into the Hi-tech display section, our eyes were caught by the fashionable appearance of the high-speed train model “Fuxing”, which is popularly called one of the “New Four Great Inventions” of China. 運用了時間狀語從句和定語從句；We were so amazed at the exhibits that we couldn’t help taking pictures all the time. 運用了結果狀語從句。
六、課堂小結
圖畫類寫作不同於一般的寫作在於三點，①圖片和所給圖示的目標性預判。因為有記敘文和議論文的可能，還有的僅僅是描述圖畫所表述的意思；②如果是議論或敘述性質的，是否需要增加合適的評論或敘述，敘述類判斷是否需要適當的評論，而評論文則判斷是否需要適當的敘述；③在理解上述兩個問題的基礎上，判斷人稱、時態、選用恰當單詞、結構進行表達，傳遞出需要表達的意思，符合考綱要求的價值觀觀點及內容；簡要之，即清楚連貫的傳遞信息，表達意思的同時，有效運用所學語言知識
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