贰
着重强调具体、可测量的指标。比如活动帮助了什么人？有多少人？你募集了多少钱？
Instead of
Raised money for children in Africa.
Try
Raised $3,000 to provide three uniforms and scholarships for students attending the Joseph Waweru Home School in Kenya (http://www.exop.org/home_school.html).
叁
使用主动式动词来解释你做了哪些事情，列出你的具体任务。
Instead of
Worked at a clinic doing different things.
Try
Organized patient diagnosis notes, sterilized tools for surgeries, assisted with x-ray analysis.
肆
为了能添加更多信息，尽量少用完整的句子，删去多余的词汇，用list的方式描述具体事情。
Instead of
I raised money to donate to a school in Ghana in Africa by selling t-shirts and bracelets.
Try
Arranged advertising events, organized fundraisers, and gave presentations at school meetings.
伍
如果你至今还在做某件事，那么在描述它的时候使用现在时态。
Instead of
I helped tour visitors around the campus and presented some information on school history and student life.
Try
I give campus tours, providing info on school history, student activities, boarding life.
陆
为了增加列表的多样化，尽量少用冗余的动词。
Instead of
Instructing, helping, teaching children tennis (how are these three different?)
Try
Instructing in proper technique, while imparting lessons in sportsmanship, health and integrity.
柒
描述你在活动中担任的职责，以此来展现自己的领导力。
Instead of
I swim on the swim team.
Try
Responsible for leading swim practices, planning fundraising events; assisting in recruiting process.
捌
如果没有太多可说的，或者只是一次性的活动，那就说清这个活动的重要性：这个活动受益者是谁，为什么？
Rather than
Tutored students.
Try
Provided support to fourth graders with particularly difficult math concepts.
玖
避免极端的语言
Instead of
to help all those in need (or) to end poverty in the world
Try
to help those in need (or) to aid in the fight against global poverty
拾
使用更高端的词汇。
Instead of
“Come up with” (or) “told people about”
Try
Develop, brainstorm (or) advertised, marketed
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