11 We should improve techniques of raising animals and reward the development of better breeds. In order to prevent and cure animal diseases and improve animal breeds, we should set up disease-prevention organizations and breeding statations in a planned way
提高技术的目的就是预防生病等，所以 in order to 可以去掉
另外，第一句讲的是 breeds， 无关疾病。第二句则两者兼具，如果要考虑用承上启下的话，可以接着第一句的 breeds 讲我们要计划建 breeding stations, 然后提预防疾病
We should improve techniques of raising livestock and reward the development of better breeds. We should draw up plans for establishing breeding statations and centers for the prevention and treatment of animal diseases.
12 All this means that the advances in science and technology will decide fundamentatlly the progress of China's modernization and are an important matter on which hinges the future and destiny of our nation.
科学技术的进步决定现代化发展，科学技术对未来很重要。
用作者的话说，关乎未来的肯定是重要的不言而喻的，所以没必要重复。
All this means that the advance in science and technology will basically determine the progress of China's modernization and that the revitalization of our nation hinges upon them
decide -> determine
revitalization: 复兴
hinge upon : 依赖
13 Within the people's governments, the standard for judging whether a person who performs official duties is competent to handle financial and economic affaris is not merely that of embezzlement or honesty. The former is a crime, and the latter is essential. The principal standard is whether one is wasteful or not.
embezzlement: 挪用公款
a person who performs official duties, 啰嗦，有专用名词的，比如 official，作者用了 cadre（党政干部。。。公职人员）。
embezzlement or honesty, the former....the latter, 正反对立，实际没必要，正常人都知道两者利害。不过作者的建议也不错，出于强调作用，用了 of course 连接词，说明这是众所周知的事情，至少在心理上让读者觉得啰嗦。
In the people's governments, the criterion for judging if a cadre is competent to handle financial and economic affairs is not merely whether hi is honest or commits embezzlement. Of course, embezzlement is a crime and honest is indespensible, but the principal criterion is whether he is wasteful or not.
14 Private capital has to meet two conditions to make profits: First, illegal profits are not allowed, only legal profits are allowed Second, excessive profits are not acceptable, only reasonable profits are allowed
这段重复很明显， are not...., are....。其实就两点：要合法，不过度
To be allowed to make profits, private capital has to meet two conditions: 1) the profits must be legal, and 2) they must not be excessive.
15 Meanwhile, China began to export technology, which means that we are no longer restricted to importing technology.
开始出口本身就意味着不只限于进口。
由于是政府公文，所以作者的修改稿只是将 export 换了个说法：进入国际市场。
Meanwhile, China's technology began to enter the international market, which means that we are no longer restricted to importing technology.
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