別人嘲笑我的托福作文是bullshit,可我卻拿了29分

別人嘲笑我的託福作文是bullshit,可我卻拿了29分

本文5640字預計閱讀時間10分鐘

按照慣例,先交代一下自己。三戰託福寫作,寫作單項成績18-22-29.

託福寫作可以說是筆者最大的驕傲了,不僅在自己身上一個月實現了從22到29的飛躍,還幫助許多身邊的小夥伴們攻克了寫作27大關。筆者自認為摸到了託福寫作的小訣竅,不需要詞彙量,不需要閱讀量,只要思路對,即使渣如我也一樣能獲得寫作高分。之前有許多同學在得知我寫作得到了一個相對不錯的分數後,都表示要看看我平時寫的作文作參考,然而,在我得意地給他們看過我平時聯繫的文章後,卻得到了大家一致的評價“詞彙初級,句式簡單,小學生作文”。

對此評價,我完全接受。我要必需承認,很多寫作只得22分的夥伴們寫作水平已經比我高到不知哪裡去。確實,筆者的英語水平實在不怎麼高,想不到什麼高級詞彙,也寫不出來那種紛繁複雜的句式,但是託福寫作考查的並不是你能否寫出華麗的句子,畢竟它的對象是母語非英語的一群人。

寫作最重要的是什麼?

事實上,ETS更在意的是你是否能在短時間內針對一個特定話題寫出一篇邏輯清晰,結構調理的文章。基於此分析,筆者認為,攻克託福寫作要點有二:

1. 模板

2. 字數

為什麼這麼說呢,首先來談模板。這裡所說的模板不只限於我們平時所講的模板,它包括所謂的框架模板,即背誦一些萬能句,或者萬能結構,但更重要的是,我們心裡要有一套對付寫作的模板。什麼意思呢,不管在考場遇到什麼題目,我們都要按照自己心裡設定好的那個模板去發展,或者說是一個寫作套路。有了套路,就不用擔心自己會沒得寫,就可以是文章更連貫,更關鍵的是,是文章符合ETS的要求。具體的應用和訓練我會在後面細講。

下面我想說說字數的問題。在寫作部分給定的時間裡,大家一般都會仔細思考,邊想邊寫,力求句子結構的多樣,詞彙的高級,這樣一來,在給定時間內一篇文章(獨立)就只能打到350-450詞。當然不是說這個字數就一定沒有高分,我有一個清華同學託福首戰考了116,他作文29,字數雖然並不多,但他句式複雜各種字詞知識水平真的太高了。而一般人,尤其是我,寫作能力沒有這麼高,怎麼辦呢?就靠字數多。

我託福寫作全程就是瘋狂打字,不浪費一分一秒的時間停頓,思考怎麼寫得更高端。即使寫的語句字詞相對大神來說比較普通,只要字數夠多,仍然可以高分。不要理會有些攻略或者老師說的,什麼綜合寫作字數不能太多,要簡練,什麼不能照抄聽力,要用自己的話複述。聽到什麼就寫什麼,聽到的全寫到作文裡,能多細節多細節,能寫多少寫多少。我大概第一篇綜合寫作可以打400字,第二篇獨立寫作都能打600字以上,常常到700字。美國人有一種奇妙的邏輯,“只有達到了一定字數才可能說清楚一件事”。

下面具體談談如何在寫作中應用模板。

如何使用模板?

綜合寫作

綜合寫作不想說太多,大家要知道的是,綜合寫作是整個writing部分的提分項,拿到good很容易。關鍵就是有一套自己的模板,並且平時把它練熟,等上了開場再根據閱讀和聽力添磚加瓦。有些老師說閱讀部分可以不用讀那麼細,甚至有人說只要讀一下每段首尾句瞭解一下段落大意即可。而在這裡,筆者想說,閱讀一定要仔細讀,不要擔心時間不夠,這部分的閱讀要比前面的reading簡單得多,不存在讀不懂的問題。

仔細讀文章的目的在於,我們是可以利用閱讀部分去理解聽力內容的。因為聽力部分一般來講都是在反駁閱讀,那麼如果我們能對閱讀有一個很清晰的理解,就可以輕鬆的對應上聽力的反駁內容。至於聽力內容,我們一定要盡己所能去還原,能聽多少寫多少,一來向閱卷人證明自己確實聽懂了聽力,二來也為自己儘可能多地增加字數。

再強調一次,一定要準備好自己的模板,模板不分好壞,只要能套上的模板都是好模板。至於高級句式,高級詞彙,這些都是錦上添花的東西,有了當然好,寫不出來也絲毫不影響你得高分。筆者很多寫作22分的小夥伴都嘲笑我的作文是bullshit,然而我就是得分高。手動奸笑臉。

獨立寫作

關於獨立寫作,筆者想說,有沒有按照套路去寫作真的是天壤之別。相信大家在最開始的練習時都會經歷一段無話可說的尷尬境地,這個問題完全可以用筆者之前所說的模板去解決。這個模板特別指我們的寫作思路,也就是我們在寫作文時會按照什麼樣的順序什麼樣的方向去寫。每次遇到作文都去東平西湊肯定是不行的,一定要形成自己的一種思維方式。一旦形成這種固定的思維,我們就可以在看到題目後不慌不忙,按部就班的完成一篇獨立寫作。筆者總結了一下自己的寫作的套路,自認為是比較便於思考的一種。

開頭:引入問題+簡單分析利弊+自己的觀點 (100詞左右,可背誦開頭模板)

主體段一:主旨句(即點明問題之利)(15詞)+一兩句話解釋為什麼會有利(30詞)+例證(100詞)+一句話總結(10詞)

主體段二:主旨句(即點明問題之利)(15詞)+一兩句話解釋為什麼會有利(30詞)+例證 (100詞)+一句話總結(10詞)

主體段三:問題之弊(即讓步段)+轉折+分析弊

結尾:總結全文之利(即主體段一和主體段二)+小小展望一下未來 (30詞,可背誦模板)

以上是筆者在寫作時的大致思路,不管遇到什麼題目,筆者都會先想兩個正向的角度加一個反向的角度,然後立馬開始背寫開頭段。可能還有人會說例證寫100詞太難了,其實我們要知道,託福作文的例子是可以編的。ETS允許考生通過虛構一個場景來證明自己的立場。筆者看完老友記後,舉例子永遠都是my nephew Ross 怎麼怎麼樣,在編故事時繪聲繪色,添油加醋,不斷地填充細節,這樣下來,100詞都不夠寫,根本不必擔心沒得寫。

講了這麼多,筆者決定放一篇考場作文(筆者自己考後回憶的)來解釋一下,這篇作文的題目大概是現在年輕人是否能更好地自己做決定。(注:紅色部分為背誦模板)

The world has witnessed a great difference in thepast several decades; ground-breaking technology replaced old clumsy tools, andthe development of economy is in a speed that beyond an average person'simagination. Now, when it come to the issue of whether young people are better able to make decisions on their own,people's opinions differ from person to person. Someone believe that withthe help of new technology, children now can make well-considered decisions ontheir own; while others imply that parents stillhave an important say on their children's decisions. However,in the ultimate analysis, I contend that young people now are betterable to make decisions. (第一段幾乎全是模板)

First of all, moderntechnology enables young people to make a well-considered decision.(主旨句) To put it another way, with theinternet, social media, and all kinds of newspaper and magazines, children noware much more well-informed than they were in the past. Thus, with theassistance of these modern technology, it is not necessary to ask parents foradvice when children are making decisions.(兩句話解釋主旨句) Take my own experience for instance. When I was choosingwhich college to go after high school graduation, I did a deep research on theinternet. Surfing colleges' official website, I know about their majors and theinternship opportunities they can provide; sending e-mails with professors, Ihad a better understanding about their speciality; talking to current studentswith social media, I got lots of their useful advice. With the help of moderntechnology, I chose a college I never regret.(例證) However, if I hadlived in the past without these technology, I might have gone to any collegethat my parents suggested to go.(一句話總結)

What is more, young peoplenow are more financial independent than they were in the past, which gives themopportunities to make decisions on their own. (主旨句) On the contrary, inthe past, teenagers usually had less chance to gain money. Therefore, they hadto get their parents' permission when they want to make decisions. (兩句話解釋主旨句)Take my friend, Bob, as an example. Bob had gone to dozens of countries with the money he made fromplaying computer games. Thus, when he was deciding which country to go for thissummer holiday, he did not have to get his parents' permission because he couldafford it by his own. (例證) However, for young people in the past, itis impossible for them to make money so easily. (一句話總結)

Indeed, parents alwayshave an important say when we are making decisions. We may listen to theirsuggestions considering that they have more experience. Thus, some people maythink that children now still depend on their parents to make decisions. (讓步)However,nowadays, the culture has changed a lot. Teenagers now focus more on freedom,and they are willing to make a decision on their own. In addition, parents noware also want to let their children make decisions so that they can grow upduring the process of making decisions. (分析利大於弊)In this case, young peopleare becoming better and better to make decisions on their own.(一句話總結)

All in all, from what has been discussed above, wecan safely draw the conclusion that young people noware better able to make decisions about their own lives, especially with thehelp of modern technology and the development of economy.(總結全文繼續套模板)

整篇作文基本是按照我的固定思維去寫的,為了讓每段字數不至於相差太多可能做了一些微調。

按照這樣的固定思維去寫,一篇500+的文章簡直是信手拈來。剛開始練可能會超時,這都不要緊,只要堅持按一種思路練下去,逐漸形成一種固化思維,寫作會越來越容易越來越快。練到最後,你會感覺到,如果不是時間的限制,我可以永遠寫下去。

最後再簡單總結下獨立寫作:編,使勁兒編。

另外,據知情人士報道,託福寫作已經全面取消了人工閱卷部分,完全依靠機判。那麼我們就更可以肆無忌憚地虛構了,機器又不知道你寫的是真的還是假的。注意,一定要減少拼寫和語法錯誤,機器判卷很嚴格,不要因為這些小錯誤失分,當然這都是可以通過大量練習改進的。

希望本篇文章能對大家的寫作有所幫助。最後,祝大家早日殺T

本為轉自:美國考試日報。 更多留學內容可以關注美擎教育公眾號哦


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