06 The large numbers are due to their assimilation of other ethnic groups, which contributes to their population growth.
人口數多的原因是....吸收其他民族....因而人口數增多
顯然邏輯上重複了。後面這部分去掉也不影響整體意思
<code>The large numbers are due to their assimilation of other ethnic groups
/<code>
這裡作者沒有提 population，可能是前文已經有了，所以不再重複
- assimilation： 吸收，同化
- ethnic：種族的
07 It is essential to delegate powers of operation and management to enterprises and institutions so as to let them manage their own affairs in accordance with the principle of having full authority for management and administration
delegate 授權。授權是什麼意思，就是讓被授權的人或機構全權管理，原文提到了三次同樣意思的管理，
其實可以改成：
<code>It is essential to deleget powers of operation, management and administration to enterprises and institutions so as to let them manage their own affairs.
/<code>
不過作者提到，由於是政府公文，所以在最後加上重複的 "full authority" 更正式一些。這也就是，重複並不一定是問題，也要看使用的場合，以及是否是必要的強調。
08 Our policy is unswerving and will not be shaken, and we shall always follow it
這裡也是三處重複了：
- unswerving
- not be shaken
- always follow
建議改成：
<code>Our policy will not change, and we shall always follow it.
/<code>
依然有點重複，但重在重複。這在中文語境下也好理解的：我們的政策不會變，我們會堅定不移的...."
09 The Party member must put the interests of the revolution and the Party first, dealing with all his personal problems in accordance with the principle that the interests of the revolution and the Party are paramount, instead of placing his own interests above those of the revolution and the Party.
這段是真囉嗦。出現了三處”利益“相關，以下的改動裡面提到了一個技巧：
- 當需要重複的時候，可以考慮用 it, them, thses 等指代
<code>The Party memeber must put the interests of the revolution and the Party first, dealing with all his personal problems in accordance with the principle that those interests are paramount.
/<code>
paramount: 至高無上的。如 The interests of the consumer should be paramount.
10 We should speed up housing construction in cities and towns, especially the building of medium and low-grade housing estates, so as to improve the housing conditions of the inhabitants there.
加速住房建設的本意也就是要改善居民的居住條件。
<code>We should speed up housing construction of urban housing, especially medium- and low-income units./<code>
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